Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It has been suggested that high school students should be involved in unpaid community services as a compulsory part of high school programmes. Most of the colleges are already providing opportunities to gain work experience。
Life skills are very important and by doing voluntary work, students can learn how to communicate with others and work in a team but also how to manage their time and improve their organizational skills. Nowadays,internet or play video games.
上面段落中，第1句表示了生活技能十分的重要，并进行了解释；第2句使用了对比论证 (如今的年轻人很少有课外活动 after-school activities) ，目的是首尾呼应，证明生活技能很重要。
they will be encouraged to do something more creative (个人认为这一句珥下一句的内容关联性不大). Skills gained through compulsory work will not only be an asset on their CV but also increase their employability. Students will also gain more respect towards work and money as they will realize that it is not that easy to earn them and hopefully will learn to spend them in a more practical way.
上面段落中，第1句和第2句关联性，我个人更倾向于修改成:By giving them compulsory work activities with charitable or community organisations, earn a higher salary and make more contribution to the society. 本段主要说明强制性社区服务可以提升工作率。